My poem

[cute angel]

Peace be upon you;

How are you members?;hope you are doing Ok

This my first participation in this section ,hope you'll like my poem

any critics or comments are highly appreciated:heh:

:closedeyes:Eternal Slumber

Where is the light!
Am I at night?
Or did I lose my sight
Tell me which of them is right!

Oh dear me

I am alone in this place
I am the new dead of human race
So,where am I in that case?

Oh dear me

I am in eternal slumber
In a dark small chamber

Smells like dust on old books
Feels like cold rocks

Oh dear me

I heard voices all around
They were my neighbours of the underground

I wanted to tell them my story
I liked them to learn about my glory

But none heard or cared
Everybody was either happy or scared

I heard screams that reached the highest skies
And laughters like songs of a bird that flies

I was confused and hopeful
I was embarresed and cheerful

I knew that there is God
Whom I loved in the dreamy world

I admitted my mistakes
With a heart that cries and shakes

Before I came to that grave
So I was happy not to be Saton's slave

Yes I still have sins like mountains
But God's mercy flows like pure fountains

God the Almighty,I am the poor dead
Whose body came from soil and to it ,it returned to have a bed
Have mercy upon me Oh compassionate God
I ask you heaven despite my sins
Because you are the most Merciful ,the most Compassionate
5_4_2010
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[غرور انثى17]

merciiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii

 

[cute angel]

شكرا اختي على المرور الكريم.

 

[مارجوري]

hiiii sis
great words.....i like the poem sOoOo much
it's full of hope and real faith
keep writting ok
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[cute angel]

hi dearest

I'm so happy to see such a reply

it's full of encouragement

thanks a bunch

Regards
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[basma nana]

And to you peace and mercy of God
......................

Really excelled in writing a poem ....
............................

It also succeeded the first time
...................................

Wait for more distinctive writing
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[cute angel]

Hi;my sister Basma

I'm really honoured to see your reply

Thanks a lot for those sweet words

and I wish I could see more of your replies next times insha'allah.

Regards
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[me against myself]

hi darling
i really liked your poem
keep up the good work
take care
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[cute angel]

Hello sis​

Thanks a lot for those kind words they mean a lot to me
yeah this is my own poem I wrote it some months ago ,it was my last poem I'll post others soon insha'allah
I can't answer you PM till I reach 100 posts sorry:heh:​

Regards​

 

[angel]

so cute word sis


keep on writing


i like it!!! thx a lot


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[cute angel]

Hi sister

we are both angels lol

Thanks a lot for the cute passage

I appreciate that

Thanks a lot​

 

[amel blidiya]

thank u so much

very beuatiful word

thanks​

 

[cute angel]

you are wecleom my dear sister

Thanks a lot for this nice comment​

 

[Dr.Odd]

Peace be upon you;

How are you members?;hope you are doing Ok

This my first participation in this section ,hope you'll like my poem

any critics or comments are highly appreciated:heh:

:closedeyes:Eternal Slumber

Where is the light!
Am I at night?
Or did I lose my sight
Tell me which of them is right!

Oh dear me

I am alone in this place
I am the new dead of human race
So,where am I in that case?

Oh dear me

I am in eternal slumber
In a dark small chamber

Smells like dust on old books
Feels like cold rocks

Oh dear me

I heard voices all around
They were my neighbors of the underground

I wanted to tell them my story
I liked them to learn about my glory

But none heard or cared
Everybody was either happy or scared

I heard screams that reached the highest skies
And laughters like songs of a bird that flies

I was confused and hopeful
I was embarresed and cheerful

I knew that there is God
Whom I loved in the dreamy world

I admitted my mistakes
With a heart that cries and shakes

Before I came to that grave
So I was happy not to be Satan's slave

Yes I still have sins like mountains
But God's mercy flows like pure fountains

God the Almighty,I am the poor dead
Whose body came from soil and to it ,it returned to have a bed
Have mercy upon me Oh compassionate God
I ask you heaven despite my sins
Because you are the most Merciful ,the most Compassionate
5_4_2010
​

Lord Byron

style

thank thee a lot
i like that style of poetry
thank thee i enjoyed
reading it
the great style

:wink:
more than a simple words to highest meanings

:re_gards:
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[cute angel]

Is it really lord Byron's style I don't know that

It's just a simple peice of writing

but I'm happy coz you members liked it

Thanks a lot I do appreciate that

Regards​

 

[kokazita]

hiiii
si
:heh:
ops
u wrote so nice topic
i love it
lu touch me by it so much
when i read it i felt as u talk about me
really i like it
u add so special topic
thnx sis

keep on
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[cute angel]

Thanks dearest for the sweet comment

they mean a lot to me​